TITLE: Demise of Same-Sex Weddings Disheartens Businesses
LINK: http://www.nytimes.com/2008/11/07/us/07marriage.html?em
The article begins with a soft descriptive lede, which gives a verbal picture of one of the businesses suffering as a result of Proposal 8 passing in California. So the lede doesn't answer any of the W's. The second graf kind of does, in a sort of off-handed way.. It basically sets up the image of this sad business owner who has to pack away the man-man wedding cake ornaments and the extra unrented tuxedos.
The article takes awhile to pick up speed, starting off with a collection of small, meaningless quotes from an assortment of business owners in California. Eventually, this gets the ball rolling to move onto bigger topics, like how Arnold Schwarzenegger had hoped the ban wouldn't happen, considering things from an economic standpoint. The article also makes use of more primary sources, like a San Francisco-based marketing executive who specializes in gay tourism. This article seems to utilize it's sources well, given the topic. The article also opens up to whether the economy will be impacted now that California is now not as gay-friendly and tourism from the LGBT community will most likely decline. Again, the article tends to rely on it's numerous sources to deliver the best information to its readers.
The article concludes with a quote from one of the small business owners mentioned in the lede of the article. The format is nice, because it starts out with a smaller topic with quotes from simple business owners, then starts talking about the bigger idea of things with use of more "official" sources, and ends small, which brings readers back home, I think. This article was well-done, considering it was a soft news article.
Friday, November 7, 2008
Thursday, November 6, 2008
Analysis: Dry Pet Food and Salmonella in Humans
TITLE: Dry Pet Food an Salmonella in Humans
LINK: http://well.blogs.nytimes.com/2008/11/06/dry-pet-food-and-human-salmonella/?ref=health
The lede answers the what: "Eight new cases of human salmonella infections linked with dry pet food," the when: "have been reported this year," and the who: "according to new data from the Centers for Disease Control and Prevention."
The nut graf makes things more specific, hooking readers with dangerous numbers that alert the audience of the 79 cases of Salmonelle that traced back to dry dog food, specifically back to an Everson, Penn. pet food plant operated by Mars Petcare US, Inc. Luckily, the plant was closed in July.
The second graf says that despite the recall, 8 more cases have been identified this year. The article expands on the illnesses, including from what state they were reported and how old the patients were, (4 - 39) and also describe symptoms.
Further down, the article talks about the C.D.C's advice on how to handle dog food and what steps should be taken to minimize harm. The conclusion gives readers resources for further information, including what brands were recalled, and provides a web page link and a number.
The article is very straight to the point, covering all the information that the public would need to know in any situation that involves dangerous or contagious illnesses, without any use of narrative or quotes. The writing style is effective in delivering the need-to-know info.
LINK: http://well.blogs.nytimes.com/2008/11/06/dry-pet-food-and-human-salmonella/?ref=health
The lede answers the what: "Eight new cases of human salmonella infections linked with dry pet food," the when: "have been reported this year," and the who: "according to new data from the Centers for Disease Control and Prevention."
The nut graf makes things more specific, hooking readers with dangerous numbers that alert the audience of the 79 cases of Salmonelle that traced back to dry dog food, specifically back to an Everson, Penn. pet food plant operated by Mars Petcare US, Inc. Luckily, the plant was closed in July.
The second graf says that despite the recall, 8 more cases have been identified this year. The article expands on the illnesses, including from what state they were reported and how old the patients were, (4 - 39) and also describe symptoms.
Further down, the article talks about the C.D.C's advice on how to handle dog food and what steps should be taken to minimize harm. The conclusion gives readers resources for further information, including what brands were recalled, and provides a web page link and a number.
The article is very straight to the point, covering all the information that the public would need to know in any situation that involves dangerous or contagious illnesses, without any use of narrative or quotes. The writing style is effective in delivering the need-to-know info.
Analysis: Rahm Emanuel Accepts Post...
TITLE: Rahm Emanuel Accepts Post as White House Chief of Staff
LINK:http://www.nytimes.com/2008/11/06/us/politics/07elect.html?hp
A quote from our president-elect is tactfully used halfway through the lede, after the important who, what, where, when, and why have been established. Overall, solid, intriguing lede.
Directly following the lede, the author, instead of summarizing that Barack chose Emanuel for White House Chief of Staff, uses Barack's very own words to tell the audience. Another killer use of killer quotes.
The article lets readers breathe for a brief moment, quickly stating who Emanuel is, (a veteran of the Clinton administration and a member of Congress from Illinois), and that he is stepping down from the fourth-ranking Democrat in the H of R to help guide the Obama administration.
Another killer quote from Emanuel this time, is nicely placed, having just been introduced into the article formally. "Now is a time for unity," Emanuel said, "I will do everything in my power to help you stitch together the frayed fabric of our politics, and help summon Americans of both parties to unite in common purpose."
I think it's a pretty good quote. It's the kind of patriotic optimism that the audience has been hearing, and wants to continue hearing during election time.
A few paragraphs down, the article shifts gears and begins to focus on Obama's transition into The White House. The transition is described in much detail, going so far as to say what Barack's Thursday schedule looked like, (morning workout at 9:30 AM, returning to his home about 90 minutes later.") I'd say this bit of information is distracting and unecessary, especially since the piece was initially about Rahm Emanuel accepting his new post.
The rest of the article is mainly fact-based, summarizing which seats were taken by which party in which state. Which eventually swings back around to talking about Emanuel's now empty seat, the special election that will take place to fill this seat, and finally, back to Rahm Emanuel himself...
Nearing the end of the piece, Senator Lyndsey Graham speaks about Rahm's qualifications and characteristics that the Obama administration will benefit from.
The conclusion sums up what's next, including the president and the president-elect's plan to help the economic crisis. It talks about a proposed $100 billion stimulus package. Then ends.
LINK:http://www.nytimes.com/2008/11/06/us/politics/07elect.html?hp
A quote from our president-elect is tactfully used halfway through the lede, after the important who, what, where, when, and why have been established. Overall, solid, intriguing lede.
Directly following the lede, the author, instead of summarizing that Barack chose Emanuel for White House Chief of Staff, uses Barack's very own words to tell the audience. Another killer use of killer quotes.
The article lets readers breathe for a brief moment, quickly stating who Emanuel is, (a veteran of the Clinton administration and a member of Congress from Illinois), and that he is stepping down from the fourth-ranking Democrat in the H of R to help guide the Obama administration.
Another killer quote from Emanuel this time, is nicely placed, having just been introduced into the article formally. "Now is a time for unity," Emanuel said, "I will do everything in my power to help you stitch together the frayed fabric of our politics, and help summon Americans of both parties to unite in common purpose."
I think it's a pretty good quote. It's the kind of patriotic optimism that the audience has been hearing, and wants to continue hearing during election time.
A few paragraphs down, the article shifts gears and begins to focus on Obama's transition into The White House. The transition is described in much detail, going so far as to say what Barack's Thursday schedule looked like, (morning workout at 9:30 AM, returning to his home about 90 minutes later.") I'd say this bit of information is distracting and unecessary, especially since the piece was initially about Rahm Emanuel accepting his new post.
The rest of the article is mainly fact-based, summarizing which seats were taken by which party in which state. Which eventually swings back around to talking about Emanuel's now empty seat, the special election that will take place to fill this seat, and finally, back to Rahm Emanuel himself...
Nearing the end of the piece, Senator Lyndsey Graham speaks about Rahm's qualifications and characteristics that the Obama administration will benefit from.
The conclusion sums up what's next, including the president and the president-elect's plan to help the economic crisis. It talks about a proposed $100 billion stimulus package. Then ends.
Wednesday, October 29, 2008
Analysis: "Liquid Smoking"
HEADLINE:"Pour yourself a cigarette: The new 'Liquid Smoking' drink that promises an instant high for smokers trying to beat the ban"
AUTHOR:Lucy Ballinger
LINK:http://www.dailymail.co.uk/health/article-1080594/Pour-cigarette-The-new-Liquid-Smoking-drink-promises-instant-high-smokers-trying-beat-ban.html
The lead is kind of odd, because it's broken up into four senteces and answers a W in each one. "It's the sort of news that will make a smoker's eyes light up" is the first bit of the soft news lead, which uses a play on words, (light and smoker)to hook the reader a little bit. The next sentence, perhaps the true lede, is a soft news lede and answers who (the company), what (the herbal drink) and why (to imitate a cigarett'es effects). The following sentences are more specific and name the drink (Liquid Smoking) and identify who it would effect and appeal to, which is very effective if used early enough.
The second graf brings in a bit of conflict, bringing up how anti-smoking groups fear it would spark addiction. The conflict helps keep the story moving and gives the piece more of a point than simply, "Hey, there's a new drink for smokers!" Following the second graf, the article begins to expand on what's in the drink and why the company assures that it isn't addictive.
The article introduces a primary source, Chief executive of United Drinks and Beauty Corporation Martin Hartman, to validify that Liquid Smoking is not harmful. He explains what exactly the chemicals in the drink are and the article uses several quotes from him. The quotes expand on the drink's effects.
The author brings up the confict with the anti-smoking groups again, which keeps readers reading all the way through the article.
The article fizzles out, ending with a lame fact on caffeine: "Drunk in excess, caffeine can lead to insomnia, anxiety and hyperactivity. "
AUTHOR:Lucy Ballinger
LINK:http://www.dailymail.co.uk/health/article-1080594/Pour-cigarette-The-new-Liquid-Smoking-drink-promises-instant-high-smokers-trying-beat-ban.html
The lead is kind of odd, because it's broken up into four senteces and answers a W in each one. "It's the sort of news that will make a smoker's eyes light up" is the first bit of the soft news lead, which uses a play on words, (light and smoker)to hook the reader a little bit. The next sentence, perhaps the true lede, is a soft news lede and answers who (the company), what (the herbal drink) and why (to imitate a cigarett'es effects). The following sentences are more specific and name the drink (Liquid Smoking) and identify who it would effect and appeal to, which is very effective if used early enough.
The second graf brings in a bit of conflict, bringing up how anti-smoking groups fear it would spark addiction. The conflict helps keep the story moving and gives the piece more of a point than simply, "Hey, there's a new drink for smokers!" Following the second graf, the article begins to expand on what's in the drink and why the company assures that it isn't addictive.
The article introduces a primary source, Chief executive of United Drinks and Beauty Corporation Martin Hartman, to validify that Liquid Smoking is not harmful. He explains what exactly the chemicals in the drink are and the article uses several quotes from him. The quotes expand on the drink's effects.
The author brings up the confict with the anti-smoking groups again, which keeps readers reading all the way through the article.
The article fizzles out, ending with a lame fact on caffeine: "Drunk in excess, caffeine can lead to insomnia, anxiety and hyperactivity. "
Thursday, October 23, 2008
Analysis: "Planning Surgery? Bring a Sharpie."
LINK: http://well.blogs.nytimes.com/2008/10/22/planning-surgery-bring-a-sharpie/
"Planning Surgery? Bring a Sharpie" written by Tara Parker
This article is as soft as news gets. It's about Sharpies for crying out loud. Sharpies and why they are effective for doctors to use when performing plastic surgery. The lede is very simple; effectively answers 4 W's and uses language that points out that a Sharpie is an everyday tool and should therefore not be combined with technical surgeries. Irony draws the reader in.
The article quickly moves on to tell readers WHY doctors are using Sharpies. This is done in the second paragraph.
The third paragraph starts with a randomly placed, (I think) "expert" attribution. Infection control experts from the University of Alabama decided to study the pens by comparing them to other pens! Also in this paragraph was a mention of George Bush, citing that he probably uses Sharpies from time to time. I wouldn't be surprized if this was a simple technique to catch the reader's attention. Usually, the name "George Bush" in print catches the public's eye.
The following paragraph explains the tests done on the Sharpies, and how other markers become easily contaminated with germs and things. Following that was a really lame quote that had nothing to do with anything: "“We went much further than what would happen in real life,” said Dr. Sarah Forgie, associate professor in the department of pediatrics.
I think it's a really vague quote. The validity seems lacking. As well as the above mentioned "Infection control experts." It's also sketchy that they talked about the control experts for four paragraphs and couldn't even get a quote. So they had to go to "Dr." Forgie of (lowercase)department of pediatrics?
The finally paragraph includes a bit of advice when using sharpies to draw on yourself while under the knife. Thanks, Tara, because we've all been there! She also directs readers onto a related article: "When Surgeons Cut the Wrong Body Part." Analysis number two, here I come!
Overall, I thought this article was poorly written. And too vague for my own liking. It used very bland language and the lede was weak. It didn't provide enough quotes or actual facts or statistics.
"Planning Surgery? Bring a Sharpie" written by Tara Parker
This article is as soft as news gets. It's about Sharpies for crying out loud. Sharpies and why they are effective for doctors to use when performing plastic surgery. The lede is very simple; effectively answers 4 W's and uses language that points out that a Sharpie is an everyday tool and should therefore not be combined with technical surgeries. Irony draws the reader in.
The article quickly moves on to tell readers WHY doctors are using Sharpies. This is done in the second paragraph.
The third paragraph starts with a randomly placed, (I think) "expert" attribution. Infection control experts from the University of Alabama decided to study the pens by comparing them to other pens! Also in this paragraph was a mention of George Bush, citing that he probably uses Sharpies from time to time. I wouldn't be surprized if this was a simple technique to catch the reader's attention. Usually, the name "George Bush" in print catches the public's eye.
The following paragraph explains the tests done on the Sharpies, and how other markers become easily contaminated with germs and things. Following that was a really lame quote that had nothing to do with anything: "“We went much further than what would happen in real life,” said Dr. Sarah Forgie, associate professor in the department of pediatrics.
I think it's a really vague quote. The validity seems lacking. As well as the above mentioned "Infection control experts." It's also sketchy that they talked about the control experts for four paragraphs and couldn't even get a quote. So they had to go to "Dr." Forgie of (lowercase)department of pediatrics?
The finally paragraph includes a bit of advice when using sharpies to draw on yourself while under the knife. Thanks, Tara, because we've all been there! She also directs readers onto a related article: "When Surgeons Cut the Wrong Body Part." Analysis number two, here I come!
Overall, I thought this article was poorly written. And too vague for my own liking. It used very bland language and the lede was weak. It didn't provide enough quotes or actual facts or statistics.
Press Release
LINK: http://tampa.fbi.gov/dojpressrel/2008/cocainecharges101708.htm
CONTACT: Steve Cole and U.S. Attorney A. Brian Albritton
CONTACT: Steve Cole and U.S. Attorney A. Brian Albritton
Wednesday, October 22, 2008
Revision: Election Interviews
LIBERAL ARTS AND OLD FARTS
KALAMAZOO, Mich. – It’s election time on a liberal arts campus in a historically blue state, yet Kalamazoo College’s opinion on the presidential race strays from an entirely leftist view.
“It’s ridiculous how you can find the presidential candidates in gossip magazines and tabloids,” Munchie-Mart employee Colleen C. Paul said. The 23-year old Kalamazoo native will be voting for Ralph Nader. “I know he’s been on the ballot for about 80 years, but hey, what have we got to lose? Paul has no affiliation other than “the common sense party.”
Paul’s manager, Henrik S. Ljung, nods his head in joking agreement. Ljung, 24, is undecided and has no party affiliation. He admits it has been tiring hearing about the presidential race, but hasn’t seen the media ripping on the candidates yet. “It’s the longest presidential election I’ve ever seen and the media has been pretty kind, which is surprising.” Ljung predicts the election will be an extremely close call, but assumes Obama will be the one coming home to the White House in January.
Kalamazoo College student Harrison S. Vogel, 19, has no party affiliation and is voting for Bob Barr. “I tend to swing towards a libertarian stance when it comes to politics,” Vogel said.
While Ljung, Vogel, and Paul remain moderately conservative in addressing questions regarding the election, some of the students at Kalamazoo College possess a different voice – one that shouts much louder.
First-year college student Liviy M. Pope’s voice is thunderous enough to stand up for the entirety of the Democratic Party. “I’m definitely liberal!” Pope exclaimed. Pope, from State College, Pennsylvania, will be voting for the Obama and Biden team, in the hopes that they will change the world’s perception of America. “We need a good foreign policy. We don’t have any friends in the world because of George W. Bush,” Pope said, grimacing.
Others agree with Pope’s anti-Republican sentiments. “A big, big reason I’m voting for Obama is because I really don’t like McCain,” student and 19 year-old democrat Anna F. Witte said. The Grand Rapids native expresses her distaste for the war, calling it depressing and unfair. “The army just called and they want me. I said “hell, no!” I’m wearing a sweater that says Make Peace!”
Make peace, make war, or make no solid assessment of the presidential race at all, street-residers of Kalamazoo run the gamut of political party stances. November 4 is sure to bring about a clashing of personal political interests.
KALAMAZOO, Mich. – It’s election time on a liberal arts campus in a historically blue state, yet Kalamazoo College’s opinion on the presidential race strays from an entirely leftist view.
“It’s ridiculous how you can find the presidential candidates in gossip magazines and tabloids,” Munchie-Mart employee Colleen C. Paul said. The 23-year old Kalamazoo native will be voting for Ralph Nader. “I know he’s been on the ballot for about 80 years, but hey, what have we got to lose? Paul has no affiliation other than “the common sense party.”
Paul’s manager, Henrik S. Ljung, nods his head in joking agreement. Ljung, 24, is undecided and has no party affiliation. He admits it has been tiring hearing about the presidential race, but hasn’t seen the media ripping on the candidates yet. “It’s the longest presidential election I’ve ever seen and the media has been pretty kind, which is surprising.” Ljung predicts the election will be an extremely close call, but assumes Obama will be the one coming home to the White House in January.
Kalamazoo College student Harrison S. Vogel, 19, has no party affiliation and is voting for Bob Barr. “I tend to swing towards a libertarian stance when it comes to politics,” Vogel said.
While Ljung, Vogel, and Paul remain moderately conservative in addressing questions regarding the election, some of the students at Kalamazoo College possess a different voice – one that shouts much louder.
First-year college student Liviy M. Pope’s voice is thunderous enough to stand up for the entirety of the Democratic Party. “I’m definitely liberal!” Pope exclaimed. Pope, from State College, Pennsylvania, will be voting for the Obama and Biden team, in the hopes that they will change the world’s perception of America. “We need a good foreign policy. We don’t have any friends in the world because of George W. Bush,” Pope said, grimacing.
Others agree with Pope’s anti-Republican sentiments. “A big, big reason I’m voting for Obama is because I really don’t like McCain,” student and 19 year-old democrat Anna F. Witte said. The Grand Rapids native expresses her distaste for the war, calling it depressing and unfair. “The army just called and they want me. I said “hell, no!” I’m wearing a sweater that says Make Peace!”
Make peace, make war, or make no solid assessment of the presidential race at all, street-residers of Kalamazoo run the gamut of political party stances. November 4 is sure to bring about a clashing of personal political interests.
Thursday, October 16, 2008
Analysis: "Home Prices Seem Far From Bottom"
LINKAGE: http://www.nytimes.com/2008/10/16/business/economy/16housing.html?ref=todayspaper
The article is from The New York Times, written by Vikas Bajaj is about home prices being "far from hitting bottom" and explains who will be hit hardest by this blow, where it's affecting the country, and offers a slew of statistics on mortgage prices and other stuff of which I don't have the proper knowledge to even begin to write about.
So. It begins with a hard-news style lede: simple, yet hardhitting. "The American housing market, where the global economic crisis began, is far from hitting bottom" it reads. Basically, it only answers 2 W's, but the two W's in particular are very effective, seeing as it's a much talked about story in the media anyways. The second graf is technically a second lede; it is elaborating on the first sentence and answers the rest of the W's. The third paragraph/nut graf tells the readers why they should care by identifying the hard-hit areas (Arizona, California, and Florida) and adds a bit more useless elaboration on the lede, stating, once again, that home prices are on the decline and fewer people are willing to buy them...yeah, so we've read twice already.
The first quote of the article comes in here. It is a quote from a primary source, a real estate guy, and definitely is the voice of authenticity in the article.
The rest of the article expands on previously stated themes to the story. For example, it elaborates on the states that are suffering the most from the drop in housing prices and what life has been like in these areas. Also in the remaining paragraphs, it cites many sources and gives many statistics on exact prices and dates. It attributes a number of reasons for the decline in prices as well, in a strictly unbias way.
The article ends with a quote, and a pretty bad one. Actually, the article ends with "he said." So, thumbs down for that.
The article is from The New York Times, written by Vikas Bajaj is about home prices being "far from hitting bottom" and explains who will be hit hardest by this blow, where it's affecting the country, and offers a slew of statistics on mortgage prices and other stuff of which I don't have the proper knowledge to even begin to write about.
So. It begins with a hard-news style lede: simple, yet hardhitting. "The American housing market, where the global economic crisis began, is far from hitting bottom" it reads. Basically, it only answers 2 W's, but the two W's in particular are very effective, seeing as it's a much talked about story in the media anyways. The second graf is technically a second lede; it is elaborating on the first sentence and answers the rest of the W's. The third paragraph/nut graf tells the readers why they should care by identifying the hard-hit areas (Arizona, California, and Florida) and adds a bit more useless elaboration on the lede, stating, once again, that home prices are on the decline and fewer people are willing to buy them...yeah, so we've read twice already.
The first quote of the article comes in here. It is a quote from a primary source, a real estate guy, and definitely is the voice of authenticity in the article.
The rest of the article expands on previously stated themes to the story. For example, it elaborates on the states that are suffering the most from the drop in housing prices and what life has been like in these areas. Also in the remaining paragraphs, it cites many sources and gives many statistics on exact prices and dates. It attributes a number of reasons for the decline in prices as well, in a strictly unbias way.
The article ends with a quote, and a pretty bad one. Actually, the article ends with "he said." So, thumbs down for that.
Wednesday, October 15, 2008
Revision: Jeffrey Ahson Obituary
AMERICAN HERO IS REMEMBERED AND HONORED
KALAMAZOO, Mich., - Navy Veteran and renowned firefighter Jeffrey Ahson, 79, passed away from complications of emphysema.
Mr. Ahson served in the Navy during World War II. He fought the battle at Midway of 1942, where his ship, the USS Emery, was attacked. Ahson rescued four wounded sailors and shot down three planes during his fight.
“Ahson was a genuine American hero,” Jeraldine Fyfe, Lieutenant Commander of the US Navy, said.
Ahson received a purple heart and a navy cross for his efforts and was promoted Ensign. He left the Navy in 1946.
Ahson moved from his hometown Chico, Calif. to Kalamazoo in 1966, where he became a firefighter. Locals knew him as a “fireman historian” and after restoring an old fire truck, Ahson visited local schools toting his collection of firefighting equipment and memorabilia. His exhibition is on display at the Kalamazoo Valley Museum.
Mr. Ahson was a member of Elk’s Lodge, Checker’s Association, and Gideon’s International. He was also an usher at John Calvin Presbyterian Church.
Mr. Ahson is survived by his wife, Therese Alpert; brother Henry Ahson of San Francisco; sister Judith Eaker of Reidsville, N.C.; sister Shirley Solomon of Newark, N.J.; daughters Lela Stalling of Pipe Creek, Tex. and Angela Molino of Omaha, Nebr.; son Richard D. Ahson of Phillipsburg, Kans.; and his five grandchildren.
Services will be held Saturday at 10 AM at the Littleton Mortuary. A burial at Memorial Park Cemetery follows. Viewings are 4:30 to 5:30 PM and 4:30 to 7:30 PM on Friday. The family requests no flowers.
KALAMAZOO, Mich., - Navy Veteran and renowned firefighter Jeffrey Ahson, 79, passed away from complications of emphysema.
Mr. Ahson served in the Navy during World War II. He fought the battle at Midway of 1942, where his ship, the USS Emery, was attacked. Ahson rescued four wounded sailors and shot down three planes during his fight.
“Ahson was a genuine American hero,” Jeraldine Fyfe, Lieutenant Commander of the US Navy, said.
Ahson received a purple heart and a navy cross for his efforts and was promoted Ensign. He left the Navy in 1946.
Ahson moved from his hometown Chico, Calif. to Kalamazoo in 1966, where he became a firefighter. Locals knew him as a “fireman historian” and after restoring an old fire truck, Ahson visited local schools toting his collection of firefighting equipment and memorabilia. His exhibition is on display at the Kalamazoo Valley Museum.
Mr. Ahson was a member of Elk’s Lodge, Checker’s Association, and Gideon’s International. He was also an usher at John Calvin Presbyterian Church.
Mr. Ahson is survived by his wife, Therese Alpert; brother Henry Ahson of San Francisco; sister Judith Eaker of Reidsville, N.C.; sister Shirley Solomon of Newark, N.J.; daughters Lela Stalling of Pipe Creek, Tex. and Angela Molino of Omaha, Nebr.; son Richard D. Ahson of Phillipsburg, Kans.; and his five grandchildren.
Services will be held Saturday at 10 AM at the Littleton Mortuary. A burial at Memorial Park Cemetery follows. Viewings are 4:30 to 5:30 PM and 4:30 to 7:30 PM on Friday. The family requests no flowers.
Analysis: "Alcohol Makes Your Brain Smaller"
The article, written by Peter M. Crosta from "Medical News Today," talks about how people who drink more alcohol may have a smaller brain volume. Apparently, every ten years of age yields a 1.9% decrease in brain volume and an increase in white matter lesions. The link between drinking and decline in brain volume appeared to be stronger in women, even though men were more likely to drink alcohol. Though testers explain that women are smaller and more susceptible to the effects of alcohols anyway. The study was conducted at Wellesley College Mass., by Carol Ann Paul, M.S.
The lede was straight to the point. It is a hard news story and answers the five W's, which alone, is enough to entice the reader into continuing the story, (Alcohol? Small brains? Whaa?!) The second graf, AKA, second paragraph of this article delivers the hardest hitting scientific data. This is where the percentage of brain mass and the relationship it has with alcohol. It also brings the story home to a certain demographic of people: "People who are developing dementia or problems with thinking, learning, and memory also tend to have lower brain volumes and larger white matter lesions." Another useful technique to get people to care. The third paragraph is the nut graph. This paragraph "proves" the accuracy of the story by stating where and when the experiment was conducted and by whom. It also talks about how exactly it was carried out, just in case any suspicious sci-nerds are reading.
The following three paragraphs just highlight some more semi-interesting experiment findings. Nothing too amazing. The article really just fizzles out. The last paragraph is actually a giant quote about the experiment author's conclusions on the testings; quite an appropriate way to end the article.
LINK: http://www.medicalnewstoday.com/articles/125393.php
The lede was straight to the point. It is a hard news story and answers the five W's, which alone, is enough to entice the reader into continuing the story, (Alcohol? Small brains? Whaa?!) The second graf, AKA, second paragraph of this article delivers the hardest hitting scientific data. This is where the percentage of brain mass and the relationship it has with alcohol. It also brings the story home to a certain demographic of people: "People who are developing dementia or problems with thinking, learning, and memory also tend to have lower brain volumes and larger white matter lesions." Another useful technique to get people to care. The third paragraph is the nut graph. This paragraph "proves" the accuracy of the story by stating where and when the experiment was conducted and by whom. It also talks about how exactly it was carried out, just in case any suspicious sci-nerds are reading.
The following three paragraphs just highlight some more semi-interesting experiment findings. Nothing too amazing. The article really just fizzles out. The last paragraph is actually a giant quote about the experiment author's conclusions on the testings; quite an appropriate way to end the article.
LINK: http://www.medicalnewstoday.com/articles/125393.php
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