LINKAGE: http://www.nytimes.com/2008/10/16/business/economy/16housing.html?ref=todayspaper
The article is from The New York Times, written by Vikas Bajaj is about home prices being "far from hitting bottom" and explains who will be hit hardest by this blow, where it's affecting the country, and offers a slew of statistics on mortgage prices and other stuff of which I don't have the proper knowledge to even begin to write about.
So. It begins with a hard-news style lede: simple, yet hardhitting. "The American housing market, where the global economic crisis began, is far from hitting bottom" it reads. Basically, it only answers 2 W's, but the two W's in particular are very effective, seeing as it's a much talked about story in the media anyways. The second graf is technically a second lede; it is elaborating on the first sentence and answers the rest of the W's. The third paragraph/nut graf tells the readers why they should care by identifying the hard-hit areas (Arizona, California, and Florida) and adds a bit more useless elaboration on the lede, stating, once again, that home prices are on the decline and fewer people are willing to buy them...yeah, so we've read twice already.
The first quote of the article comes in here. It is a quote from a primary source, a real estate guy, and definitely is the voice of authenticity in the article.
The rest of the article expands on previously stated themes to the story. For example, it elaborates on the states that are suffering the most from the drop in housing prices and what life has been like in these areas. Also in the remaining paragraphs, it cites many sources and gives many statistics on exact prices and dates. It attributes a number of reasons for the decline in prices as well, in a strictly unbias way.
The article ends with a quote, and a pretty bad one. Actually, the article ends with "he said." So, thumbs down for that.
Thursday, October 16, 2008
Wednesday, October 15, 2008
Revision: Jeffrey Ahson Obituary
AMERICAN HERO IS REMEMBERED AND HONORED
KALAMAZOO, Mich., - Navy Veteran and renowned firefighter Jeffrey Ahson, 79, passed away from complications of emphysema.
Mr. Ahson served in the Navy during World War II. He fought the battle at Midway of 1942, where his ship, the USS Emery, was attacked. Ahson rescued four wounded sailors and shot down three planes during his fight.
“Ahson was a genuine American hero,” Jeraldine Fyfe, Lieutenant Commander of the US Navy, said.
Ahson received a purple heart and a navy cross for his efforts and was promoted Ensign. He left the Navy in 1946.
Ahson moved from his hometown Chico, Calif. to Kalamazoo in 1966, where he became a firefighter. Locals knew him as a “fireman historian” and after restoring an old fire truck, Ahson visited local schools toting his collection of firefighting equipment and memorabilia. His exhibition is on display at the Kalamazoo Valley Museum.
Mr. Ahson was a member of Elk’s Lodge, Checker’s Association, and Gideon’s International. He was also an usher at John Calvin Presbyterian Church.
Mr. Ahson is survived by his wife, Therese Alpert; brother Henry Ahson of San Francisco; sister Judith Eaker of Reidsville, N.C.; sister Shirley Solomon of Newark, N.J.; daughters Lela Stalling of Pipe Creek, Tex. and Angela Molino of Omaha, Nebr.; son Richard D. Ahson of Phillipsburg, Kans.; and his five grandchildren.
Services will be held Saturday at 10 AM at the Littleton Mortuary. A burial at Memorial Park Cemetery follows. Viewings are 4:30 to 5:30 PM and 4:30 to 7:30 PM on Friday. The family requests no flowers.
KALAMAZOO, Mich., - Navy Veteran and renowned firefighter Jeffrey Ahson, 79, passed away from complications of emphysema.
Mr. Ahson served in the Navy during World War II. He fought the battle at Midway of 1942, where his ship, the USS Emery, was attacked. Ahson rescued four wounded sailors and shot down three planes during his fight.
“Ahson was a genuine American hero,” Jeraldine Fyfe, Lieutenant Commander of the US Navy, said.
Ahson received a purple heart and a navy cross for his efforts and was promoted Ensign. He left the Navy in 1946.
Ahson moved from his hometown Chico, Calif. to Kalamazoo in 1966, where he became a firefighter. Locals knew him as a “fireman historian” and after restoring an old fire truck, Ahson visited local schools toting his collection of firefighting equipment and memorabilia. His exhibition is on display at the Kalamazoo Valley Museum.
Mr. Ahson was a member of Elk’s Lodge, Checker’s Association, and Gideon’s International. He was also an usher at John Calvin Presbyterian Church.
Mr. Ahson is survived by his wife, Therese Alpert; brother Henry Ahson of San Francisco; sister Judith Eaker of Reidsville, N.C.; sister Shirley Solomon of Newark, N.J.; daughters Lela Stalling of Pipe Creek, Tex. and Angela Molino of Omaha, Nebr.; son Richard D. Ahson of Phillipsburg, Kans.; and his five grandchildren.
Services will be held Saturday at 10 AM at the Littleton Mortuary. A burial at Memorial Park Cemetery follows. Viewings are 4:30 to 5:30 PM and 4:30 to 7:30 PM on Friday. The family requests no flowers.
Analysis: "Alcohol Makes Your Brain Smaller"
The article, written by Peter M. Crosta from "Medical News Today," talks about how people who drink more alcohol may have a smaller brain volume. Apparently, every ten years of age yields a 1.9% decrease in brain volume and an increase in white matter lesions. The link between drinking and decline in brain volume appeared to be stronger in women, even though men were more likely to drink alcohol. Though testers explain that women are smaller and more susceptible to the effects of alcohols anyway. The study was conducted at Wellesley College Mass., by Carol Ann Paul, M.S.
The lede was straight to the point. It is a hard news story and answers the five W's, which alone, is enough to entice the reader into continuing the story, (Alcohol? Small brains? Whaa?!) The second graf, AKA, second paragraph of this article delivers the hardest hitting scientific data. This is where the percentage of brain mass and the relationship it has with alcohol. It also brings the story home to a certain demographic of people: "People who are developing dementia or problems with thinking, learning, and memory also tend to have lower brain volumes and larger white matter lesions." Another useful technique to get people to care. The third paragraph is the nut graph. This paragraph "proves" the accuracy of the story by stating where and when the experiment was conducted and by whom. It also talks about how exactly it was carried out, just in case any suspicious sci-nerds are reading.
The following three paragraphs just highlight some more semi-interesting experiment findings. Nothing too amazing. The article really just fizzles out. The last paragraph is actually a giant quote about the experiment author's conclusions on the testings; quite an appropriate way to end the article.
LINK: http://www.medicalnewstoday.com/articles/125393.php
The lede was straight to the point. It is a hard news story and answers the five W's, which alone, is enough to entice the reader into continuing the story, (Alcohol? Small brains? Whaa?!) The second graf, AKA, second paragraph of this article delivers the hardest hitting scientific data. This is where the percentage of brain mass and the relationship it has with alcohol. It also brings the story home to a certain demographic of people: "People who are developing dementia or problems with thinking, learning, and memory also tend to have lower brain volumes and larger white matter lesions." Another useful technique to get people to care. The third paragraph is the nut graph. This paragraph "proves" the accuracy of the story by stating where and when the experiment was conducted and by whom. It also talks about how exactly it was carried out, just in case any suspicious sci-nerds are reading.
The following three paragraphs just highlight some more semi-interesting experiment findings. Nothing too amazing. The article really just fizzles out. The last paragraph is actually a giant quote about the experiment author's conclusions on the testings; quite an appropriate way to end the article.
LINK: http://www.medicalnewstoday.com/articles/125393.php
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